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Re: Summer
As much as I don't like these kinds of rhyming poems, I have to say this surprised me. When I started reading I kind of thought this wouldn't be good, ...
Jul 25, 2009 -
Re: Being four
So, um, not really feeling this. It's good and has a good concept, but it could be better, a lot better. The world is an oyster I am the pearl ...
Jul 24, 2009 -
Re: Life & love...and...The heart
Life And Love The first two lines are nice, but the third line doesn't seem to fit that well though. I feel like it's just kinda thrown in there, I ...
Jul 24, 2009 -
Re: The Personification of Spring :-)
First off, this is a great poem, I love the imagery, it really made me feel like (1 Spring is a little girl and (2 you tend to get a ...
Jun 23, 2009 -
Re: that solitary good-bye
That solitary good-bye from those who we pre-mourn... Does but little to comfort the grieving soul. The opening stanza feels a little weak. And to be honest, it kind of ...
Jun 23, 2009 -
Re: Alone
She has scars on her wrists that slowely heal, but every time they heal she reopens them. The first line makes me not like this poem automatically, to be honest. ...
Jun 22, 2009 -
Re: An Air Raid Scene
Aware of the situation, aware of the wingless creation, as all greedily descend, to give life a dramatic end, Given the title of the topic is WWII, starting off with ...
Jun 22, 2009 -
Re: My Love
Well, this poem isn’t bad, but you need to brush it up a bit. Also, my suggestions, if you’re going to rhyme, I’d really put a lot of effort into ...
Jun 22, 2009 -
Re: Night Walker
I really don't think this is too great of a poem. To be honest, it feels like two or three different poems that have been spliced together roughly. Some stanza's ...
Jun 21, 2009 -
Re: Daddy?
You never came. Full of broken promises from the start No, before even. Did you think that some money and a hello kitty clock would make it up? Maybe if ...
Jun 21, 2009 -
Re: if I could leave you
So, firstly, this is my first review, so...good luck to us both, eh? If I could leave you I'd break free unlock my door and throw the key into the ...
Jun 21, 2009
